what linguistic choices have you made in your re-write with regard to lexis? what linguistic choices have you made in your re-write with regard to syntax?

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Word limit: 1000 words in total. You should spend around 300 word for the re-write, and 700 words on your rationale. The emphasis of this assignment is firmly on the rationale. Please include:
what linguistic choices have you made in your re-write with regard to lexis?
what linguistic choices have you made in your re-write with regard to syntax?
what linguistic choices have you made in your re-write with regard to overall text organisation?
and, crucially, why have you made these choices. Please be explicit and provide specific examples:e.g. ‘In paragraph 1 I have changed X to Y in order to put emphasis on agency’ instead of ‘I have changed the syntactic structure’.
Normal referencing applies.