n all, this paper was a good start, but it lacked specificity. You talked much about policy change and technology but there were never any clear examples of what you are referencing. What policy changes? Policy changes in administration, nursing, racial inequalities? There is no clear direction.
What does it have to do with race or biracial children, the connections need to be built so that the paper has clarity. I would go back and provide the specificity needed to narrow down exactly what you are trying to say and how it has impacted you culturally.